Many thanks for the feedback. The main value in coverage services is in getting an initial gut reaction on the material from an industry professional and in this case the script clearly didn’t resonate with the reader (at any level unfortunately) and that is obviously disappointing. The acid test for a comedy script surely has to be ‘did it make the reader laugh? (or entertain them at least)’ and here the answer appears to be a resounding ‘no’. Please thank the reader for taking the time to offer so many thoughts on the piece. Some of them will undoubtedly come in useful for the second draft, which I will also probably send to Industrial Scripts for consideration when the time comes (probably another twelve months given current commitments). One thing that would assist the writer would be knowing a little more about the reader in terms of demographic (e.g. age, nationality, industry background etc). While any writing worth its salt should appeal to all, the reality is that it is a very subjective business and knowing the demographic is very useful in building a picture of who the material might appeal to. Thanks again and best wishes to you all. Giles